Camp portfolio sample writing

Descpion:

In writing we have been writing about camp I was writing to entertain so I made it funny.

First we had to make our 1 draft then we looked back over it to make it better 

This is my writing:

FARTS THEY ARE DEADLY 

The sniper his name is Eli.

Silent still and deadly one shot kills he fires everything around his dead straight away.

Now the story

We were trying to sleep there was 7 of us in our cabin.But then bang one man down bang bang bang bang it was only me and Eli then I released Eli was the sniper I ran but bang I was DOWN.....

The archer still and silent but so deadly his name was Max Max Hannan ...........

We were doing an activity then i see this little movement out the corner of my eye.

But I spin around because my mate had just been shot in the chest with an arrow I turn back around then I see him noooo I scream an arrow was gliding at me I was hit it went straight through me.

 

FARTS THEY ARE DEADLY 

Feedback & feedfordwards: you did really good at using great words but

you could of done better by describing the people in the story. #Fletcher

Evolution:I think i did well but it could be longer and I agree with fletcher.

TE REO portfolio post

Description: in TE REO we have been looking at family trees this is my mums side of the family my dads is alot bigger. We learnt how to pronounce the Maori words for our family members.

Image:

Feedfordwards and feedback: i like how you can go back and know many generation.next time you could find out the names of some . Max h

Evaluation:I think I should of added my dads family to.

Camp portfolio sample

Description:this week we went to camp it was so fun we did ten activities there was a water slide and we got to ride horses they were rite outside our cabin we could here them eating and farting. 

The cabin were good I had my best friend and my cousin in my cabin so that was good 

Feedback & Feedfordwards: it was good and you described nicely 

But next time you could put some more pictures. -Louis

Listening

Descpion:

In class we have making a movie about listening it hade to be 30sc and 3p groups the group hade to have a y5 y6 and a mix of girls and boys.

Video:

Big idea: we have leant that the best listening is active listening active listening I when you are making eye contact with them and body language or agreeing with them and asking questions.

And there is. Bad listening like me to or busy listening me to listening is when you but in and talk about how you did something alike and busy listening is when you are doing something different and not listening.

Feedback and feedfordwards:your video is good but you need to speak a little bit louder other than that it is really good -Atlanta 

Evolution:

I think that pur group did good but we should have been more excited about it 

Treaty

Description: For the last week we have been working towards making a Waitangi Day video / poster treaty / myn is the treaty everyone worked hard to make their. 

Big idea: for my activity I made a treaty with Eli we decided to make a vote for the top five questions out of seven. Then we put them all in to our treaty. 

We learnt that the British came over to new zeland to get more land but they made bad deals and the treaty was translated badly.

Feedback: I think the treaty is a very cleaver idea to do and I think it's turned out really good. Next you could of added more rules. 

Evaluation: I think I did well in writing out the treaty and me and Eli worked well together.

I think we were multi because we had more then three ideas 

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 Description:

My word is Opatuaity

I wanted opatuaity to be my word 

Never miss an opatuaity

One word is a word that mean something to you ( goal ) 

Our teachers in poutuma told us about it.

We made some art to show our one word 

Feedfordwards feedback:I really like how you did a spider but I can't really read it.

Elvoute