Description: We read the poem “My Remarkable Journey” which inspired us to write our own remarkable journeys about why our homework wasn’t at school today.
I work up yay school oh no hoooooooomework is due in today and I have not got my home work i am going to get killed by troy he is so strong but let me tell you why I do not have my home work.
So I was at the park a very bad park a troll came and sat next to me but I do not know that it was a troll because it was dress up as a old laddy in a dress and high heels. He stoll my homework out of my pokit I started casing it but I fall in slippery sicking sand but a hark came swooping down a got me a dropped me on the troll but it had all reddy aten my homework so I cut its tumy open but is was all reddy Brent by the asied in your stumick. THE END
We decided that a quality piece of writing has the following things. Reflect on whether these things are in your story:
Introduction: It hooks the reader in the first few lines making them want to read more
Punctuation: Is your writing ready for a reader? Does your punctuation make it easy for them to read?
Short sentences: Do you create suspense by using these in your writing?
Onomatopoeia: Are these in your writing to create impact?
Alliteration: Are these in your writing to create impact?
Similes/Metaphors: Are these in your writing to create impact?
1. What do you think is the best part of your story? When I fall in the sand
2. What was the hardest part about completing this portfolio sample? Doing the blog post
3. Next time, what is a goal you can work towards? Making my story longer
Feedback/Feedforward:this is a really good story hunter you could correct your spelling.